Saturday, September 22, 2007

Show and Tell

Today I really enjoyed the meeting with Deb. She was GREAT! I did have one question I really wanted to ask her but really didn't want to look like a goober so I'll ask the group instead.

This is a question that has bugged me for a long time. How do you show and not tell? Are there any articles out there on the subject?

Barb :-)


Carla Swafford said...

LOL! You won't ask Deb but you post it for the world to see! So funny!!! Are we related? :-)

The book SELF-EDITING FOR FICTION WRITERS by Renni Browne and Dave King has a chapter on it.

I can give you an example.

Tell: He went to the store.
Show: He jogged along the sidewalk until reached the package store's door.

Deborah Matthews said...

Showing brings more emotion into the story. Brings the reader closer into your characters and your story. Let me see if I can give an example:

She cried.
Hot tears of humiliation ran down her cheeks.

I've seen articles on the internet, if you want to google it.

Angel said...

The book Carla recommended gives great examples and explanations! I read it over and over during my revisions. :)


JoAnn said...

One that I'm very guilty of is telling, then trying to show it!


What she'd done made him mad. He slammed his fist on the table and his face turned scarlet.

The first sentence is telling -- I don't need that one. The second sentence shows the reader all she needs to know. So I revised it to:

When he found out what she'd done, he slammed his fist on the table, and his face turned scarlet.

I know it's not a great example, but maybe it will help you a little.

Good luck!

JoAnn said...

Actually, now that I look at my example again, I realize that it's pretty bad! The phrase "When he found out what she had done" is just as telling as the previous.

Sorry -- probably should have just kept my *mouth* shut! LOL!